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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Nov 2, 2005 11:56:45 GMT -5
I love this Chapter - there is so much here, a definite thread that weaves its way through what is taking place - a revisiting and renewal - for each of the characters. The dinner scene is wonderful, the ease and commaderie between the characters, the laughter I think Jim and Marty really could share - there could have been so much more to that relationship had the series continued and I think you are doing a remarkable job in expanding on it and making it real. And of course those moments where Jim is still reconciling things - so well written! I told you yesterday and I'll tell you again, WOW! You sure know how to pull it all together!
LongLashes
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Post by Eyphur on Nov 2, 2005 12:26:51 GMT -5
The first thing I did when I got out of bed this morning was check for a new chapter. I was delighted to find one so that I would have something to contemplate in my 3 hour class this morning. I love where this story is going the character development is great.
Impatiently awaiting the next chapter,
I remain,
Blind Justice Fanfic Junkie
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Post by mlm828 on Nov 3, 2005 1:10:13 GMT -5
What can I say, except that now I have a new favorite chapter? The part about the family photos was so well done, and so true to life. Just when we think we have dealt with something, it comes back to bite us!
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Post by bjobsessed on Nov 3, 2005 2:26:11 GMT -5
I really enjoyed this chapter. I found the whole thing very touching. Christie was being sensitive to Jim's feelings about the contents of the boxes, Jim was sensitive to what Christie might feel about his old girlfriend, and Marty and Jim were getting along with each other. After the first few weeks of the show, I always thought Marty was a good guy underneath all the nastiness. You've proven me right.
Also, nice to see Jim more comfortable with his blindness. Not always on the defensive or looking like he's got something to prove. Not to say that he'll never wish he wasn't--as you demonstrated so well--but he's not acting like he's got something to prove all the time.
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Post by maggiethecat on Nov 3, 2005 8:05:17 GMT -5
Chapter Thirteen was terrific, Shmeep!
Not only do you always get the emotional content absolutely right, you capture the humor of the characters, as witness the wickedly funny exchange between Jim and Marty about "how to" get a cool dog like Hank. Shows you how far both characters have come. Very nicely done and keep em comin'!
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Post by hoosier on Nov 5, 2005 16:47:47 GMT -5
Marty as a handyman, who would have thought it. And Jim pracially running to check on what was going on between Marty and Shannon. I also loved how Christie was trying to give the "essence" of Marty Russo and how he seemed shocked that women can also appreciate a nice behind. Eagerly awaitin the next chapter.
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Post by anna on Nov 5, 2005 18:08:23 GMT -5
I keep going back to the bit about younger brother Sean dying when Jim was nine and Shannon - obviously a "replacement" baby - being born the next year. That explains so much about the way the Dunbar family members interact and about Jim's need to protect those he cares about or considers vulnerable. Wow - you managed all of that in a couple of sentences.
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Post by shmeep on Nov 5, 2005 18:47:57 GMT -5
I keep going back to the bit about younger brother Sean dying when Jim was nine and Shannon - obviously a "replacement" baby - being born the next year. That explains so much about the way the Dunbar family members interact and about Jim's need to protect those he cares about or considers vulnerable. Wow - you managed all of that in a couple of sentences. I'm so glad someone caught that! (Karma for you--just because.) |
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Post by shmeep on Nov 12, 2005 14:31:12 GMT -5
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Post by bjobsessed on Nov 12, 2005 15:25:49 GMT -5
I just read it and I love it! I love how you brought Artie and Pete back into the story. My favourite part though was the end of the chapter where Jim tells Christie about Pete and how she kept him (Jim) from blowing his brains out. Even though he says he doesn't think he would have done it, you never know.
The little moments where Jim opens up to people always get me (thump thump goes my heart).
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Post by bjobsessed on Nov 12, 2005 16:29:52 GMT -5
I've debated over whether to say this or not, but I already said something similar on another board once so I guess it doesn't matter.
Another reason I really like the part where Jim opens up to Christie is because I felt like killing myself once too. (Don't worry. It was a lifetime ago.) I hated having a disability and it was hard growing up in the "old days." I'd like to think it's a little better now. I had very few friends growing up and was always the subject of a lot of jokes and mean teasing--both from kids and adults. I thought about killing myself for most of my teenage years, but obviously never did. Just like Jim had Christie, I had my Grandpa. I knew it would kill him if anything happened to me. That is the only reason I never did anything. I have great parents, but my Grandpa and I had something special that was just between us.
I totally identify with Jim's feelings and his reluctance to share that with anyone. It's very personal and hard to talk about. (I've never told anyone in my family.) There comes a time when you have to decide whether or not you're going to live life or wallow in self-pity. Obviously, Jim and I chose to live life.
You have to accept the life you are given. How you choose to live it is up to you.
I know this is kind of heavy and I'm sorry about that. I just felt the need to say it for some reason.
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Post by shmeep on Nov 12, 2005 18:20:09 GMT -5
Thanks for sharing that with is, bjobsessed. I'm glad you had the support of your grandpa growing up and that you're still around today. I don't know you in the traditional way, but I can tell you're a sweet, generous, and supportive person and it's a joy to know you on this board.
And while I'm at it...thank you for always supporting all the people here who write or make videos. I'm sure I speak for all of us when I say that is much appreciated.
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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Nov 12, 2005 18:24:15 GMT -5
You already know how I feel about this chapter - but I'll put it out here anyway. The writing is wonderful, and the characterizations are so well done - little things like Jim knowing everything there is to know about that room, his wanting to touch everything, feel everything is vivid without much description - it is an image that is burned into the mind without the necessity of too many words. To weave the characters from the episodes, like Artie and Pete, into the chapters so effortlessly is wonderful. You've done it again - "And sometimes the way you do it, leaves me impressed!"
LongLashes
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Post by bjobsessed on Nov 12, 2005 19:30:48 GMT -5
I don't know you in the traditional way, but I can tell you're a sweet, generous, and supportive person and it's a joy to know you on this board. And while I'm at it...thank you for always supporting all the people here who write or make videos. I'm sure I speak for all of us when I say that is much appreciated. Aww thanks Shmeep. You know, I wasn't always so honest about my feelings and the way things used to be, but over time you realize that's the only way people will ever change. Somehow you have to make them understand as much as possible. As I told Steven Bochco, BJ enlighten many people to the struggles of not only the blind but disabled in general. If you change one person's attitude you change many because of all the contacts one person has. I also think you can change the way people think by the way you handle your situation in life. If you don't walk around with a big chip on your shoulder and instead, show them that you are a person who happens to have a disability and not a disabled person, they come around pretty quick. Kids are still the best though. They ask their questions and they're done. They don't have the same hang ups as adults. That's one of the reasons I love the scene in "Four Feet Under" where Jim and Jake Crider are playing in the backyard. It shows that Jake thought Jim and Hank were cool and probably didn't give Jim's blindness a second thought. That's more than I can say for the adults in the series. |
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Post by mlm828 on Nov 12, 2005 20:16:36 GMT -5
You know, I wasn't always so honest about my feelings and the way things used to be, but over time you realize that's the only way people will ever change. Somehow you have to make them understand as much as possible. As I told Steven Bochco, BJ enlighten many people to the struggles of not only the blind but disabled in general. If you change one person's attitude you change many because of all the contacts one person has. I also think you can change the way people think by the way you handle your situation in life. If you don't walk around with a big chip on your shoulder and instead, show them that you are a person who happens to have a disability and not a disabled person, they come around pretty quick. Kids are still the best though. They ask their questions and they're done. They don't have the same hang ups as adults. That's one of the reasons I love the scene in "Four Feet Under" where Jim and Jake Crider are playing in the backyard. It shows that Jake thought Jim and Hank were cool and probably didn't give Jim's blindness a second thought. That's more than I can say for the adults in the series. Karma for you, bjobsessed -- you are so right! |
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