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Post by anna on Aug 31, 2006 7:24:52 GMT -5
How wonderful to wake up to new fic! And this is so true to Marty's character - exasperated at having to deal with Jim, but worried about Jim's hands. The dominatrix angle is, uh . . . interesting.  |
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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Aug 31, 2006 18:33:28 GMT -5
OOOOOOOOO! An extremely interesting start to what promises, like your others, to be a very entertaining ride. Hope you don't make us wait too long with any of them! (Now, dare I ask how it is that you appear to be so familar with what makes your very strong female charater tick, right down to her boots! Very descriptive ) |
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Post by rducasey on Aug 31, 2006 19:34:15 GMT -5
"Someday you two are going to wake up in a bathtub...." so glad you made that happen Natasha, but thankfully no exfoliating backs. This is very good, and can't wait to see what happens.
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Post by Dreamfire on Aug 31, 2006 23:03:40 GMT -5
OOOOOOOOO! An extremely interesting start to what promises, like your others, to be a very entertaining ride. Hope you don't make us wait too long with any of them! (Now, dare I ask how it is that you appear to be so familar with what makes your very strong female charater tick, right down to her boots! Very descriptive ) Hi Inuvik, It'll be a short ride, but hopefully fun. Yes you can ask, and no this is not a part of myself I'm popping in here, just a wild imagnation and a bit of play to lighten a heavy scene. Cheers, Ashatan Actually my boots are red. |
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Post by Dreamfire on Aug 31, 2006 23:05:05 GMT -5
"Someday you two are going to wake up in a bathtub...." so glad you made that happen Natasha, but thankfully no exfoliating backs. This is very good, and can't wait to see what happens. Have no fear, absolutely never ever going there. Ew yuk. I'm so excited you picked up where it came from! ;D A |
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Post by bjobsessed on Aug 31, 2006 23:50:45 GMT -5
Wow N. Your female character is a little scary. It's amazing how she can turn from ugly to sweet in 2 seconds flat!
A year ago, if you'd told me that Jim and Marty would be trapped in the bathroom together, I'm sure they would have done everything to make sure that did not happen. So the irony--it doesn't escape me.
Couldn't resist that! I hope you have time to finish this soon. It's very suspenseful. I'm sitting on the edge of my....never mind.
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Post by bjobsessed on Sept 2, 2006 2:19:09 GMT -5
I was certainly not disappointed by the rest of the story. It is so funny to me how much Puss hates Marty and loves Jim. It's also a little scary how fast she turns from "nice" to nasty. So true of a twisted mind though.
I really like the way you forced Jim and Marty to work together. Maybe--just maybe--they have a better understanding of each other. Once again, you've kept Jim true to the show by allowing him to remain calm and do what he had to do to keep them as safe as possible--asking questions, analysing, always thinking. Then you have Marty who speaks before he thinks or just says what he's thinking--very true as well.
The picture you paint at the end had me laughing. Jim sprawled over Puss, lipstick on his face, CNN cameras catching that and then Christie. Nice way to relieve all the tension that built up as the story progressed.
Wonder how much they told Fisk or how many beers it took before they told all.
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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Sept 2, 2006 9:49:01 GMT -5
Nice finish! You kept the strong visuals throughout and I love the "partnership" that was forced to form between Marty and Jim.
Poor Jim, me thinks although Tom was the one shot, he was the most colorful detective in the Squad.
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