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Post by mlm828 on Nov 11, 2006 23:24:48 GMT -5
I've posted a new story, "Visual Memories," in the Fan Fiction section. It's the story of the day, almost five years after the bank, when Jim realizes he's losing his visual memories. It's also at fanfiction.net: www.fanfiction.net/s/3240986/1/ |
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Post by bjobsessed on Nov 11, 2006 23:50:17 GMT -5
Wow, that is a powerful piece of writing. You communicated Jim's feelings very well. I really felt bad for him--especially when he couldn't remember what Christie looked like. That must have been the worst, but she was actually pretty understanding about it all. Nice.
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Post by Dreamfire on Nov 11, 2006 23:53:34 GMT -5
Martha, what a wonderful piece. And again you bring the real Jim Dunbar to the fore with his own particular brand of rough edges. Thanks so much for writing it. Is there any chance you will give us another glimpse into this time in Jim's life? It was... tantilising.  |
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Post by mlm828 on Nov 12, 2006 2:26:22 GMT -5
In case anyone is wondering, the twins are "borrowed" from "Expectations," with the author's permission. Thanks, shmeep!
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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Nov 12, 2006 9:13:39 GMT -5
You have given us a powerful glimpse into another dimension on Jim's road to acceptance and it is, as always, very well done. If memories fade for the sighted, we have things to fall back on. But what must it be like to know that you are losing the last "visions" of what you used to know? You have beautifully captured how Jim sees things now and have portrayed his angst perfectly.
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Post by shmeep on Nov 13, 2006 11:04:33 GMT -5
Mlm, I am in awe! That is a fantastic bit of writing. You went very deep with this one and the way you described what was happening in Jim's mind was beautiful and realistic and the whole thing came together in a way that felt natural. Wow.
And you're welcome for the twins. I'm glad to see them turning up somewhere. I lost my motivation for writing "Expectations" a few months back--for obvious reasons--but I always meant to at least finish it. Oh well. Reading this makes me feel as though I get to see what ended up happening with all that. I'm glad the family turned out happy! And I agree with Ashatan. You need to give us more from this time period. It's fascinating.
I love how you gave the girls the instinct to not get underfoot when Jim is around but not necessarily the full comprehension of what blindness means. That seems very realistic to me. I don't know any children of blind parents, but I know a bunch of kids with Deaf parents and they know a lot by instinct even before they realize what it all means. Most Codas (children of deaf adults) I know will instinctively use sign with Deaf people and will talk to hearing people. They just know to do that, even before the age of three. It always amazes me.
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Post by maggiethecat on Nov 13, 2006 19:00:56 GMT -5
What Shmeep said, mlm. I too am in awe, and having the very writerly response: Damn, why didn't I think of that?So, we're into the fourth season now? Oh how I wish we were.  Sensitive, strong, and altogether persuasive. Keep it coming!  |
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Post by hoosier on Nov 14, 2006 18:23:47 GMT -5
mlm, what a beautiful and gutwrenching story. You could really feel for Jim--especially how he didn't even notice it happening and how he discovered he was now equating something with how it feels or smells instead of "seeing" it in his head. Acceptance comes at a pretty high price.
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