Day of Reckoning

[mlm828]

We seem to have been in a fan fiction "drought" recently, so here's something to tide us over. I've posted the first chapter of a new story, "Day of Reckoning," in the Fan Fiction section. Chapter One is rather short, but there's more to come.

It's also at fanfiction.net: www.fanfiction.net/s/3451065/1/

[bjobsessed]

Very nice start, mlm! Can't wait to find out what happens next.

[Dreamfire]

Thank you for a quick cold drink on a long hot droughty day!
I love a fic that starts with full on action! 2 armoured car guys dead and bags of money stolen - nice!

I especially found the opening dialogue between the driver and his partner very real. When the first guy got out I found myelf calling "No, it's a trick! it's a trick!" My shoulders droppped when the second guy was killed so quickly too!

A nice juicy crime for our 8th precinct guys! Yay!

"Bring it on."


Jim, thinking about the armoured car robbery...


The bullet's came back...



Nope, nothing to add, yet.

[Deleted]

Awesome! And I don't think I stand alone when I say to mlm:

DON'T MAKE ME WAIT TOO LONG FOR THE NEXT INSTALLMENT!!!!

[krissie]

mlm, I'm so glad you pointed out that chapter one is short because that means I don't need to!

Good start. And you've left me wanting more. That's always a good sign.

But now -- and to borrow a phrase -- I'm just a little frustrated here!

Krissie

[maggiethecat]

A perfect opening, mlm -- crisp, sharp, and obviously leaving us all panting for more. All it needs is Gary Felder to direct.

[hoosier]

Slick. All the time I was wondering if Jim will suddenly flash back to the bank. No real reason except that it involves an armored car robbery. Please don't make us wait too long!

[Eyphur]

*Does new fanfic Happy Dance*

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[Duchess of Lashes]

Great start, MLM! The only missing detail was a description of the armored car, red and black perhaps, with Dunbar written across the side? Hope you won't keep us waiting too long 'cause this one sounds like something we will definitely be able to sink our teeth into!

[mlm828]

Since Chapter One is so short, I've gone ahead and posted Chapter Two in the Fan Fiction section.

You may think that, unlike the armored truck, we've taken a little detour in Chapter Two, but I assure you, we are going -- somewhere!

Chapter Two is also at fanfiction.net: www.fanfiction.net/s/3451065/2/

Many thanks to "Mame" for sharing her knowledge of Queens neighborhoods.

[Deleted]

mlm828 said:

Since Chapter One is so short, I've gone ahead and posted Chapter Two in the Fan Fiction section.

You may think that, unlike the armored truck, we've taken a little detour in Chapter Two, but I assure you, we are going -- somewhere!

Chapter Two is also at fanfiction.net: www.fanfiction.net/s/3451065/2/

Many thanks to "Mame" for sharing her knowledge of Queens neighborhoods.

Oh my dear, I am but a humble girl from da hood.....

and always my pleasure to help you!

Thanks for the shout-out!

[Dreamfire]

Thanks Martha, It was so nice to see this pop up earlier than expected. I don't mind the foray awy from the case for a mo' especially for this glimpse into a social life between the Lt and the detectives. I especially liked the tension building when Tom misunderstood what Jim was asking. And I found the strategizing about directing Christie to Fisk's very real for the JD character. Chris getting pissed off is cool too!

Thanks, looking forward t othe next one.
A

[bjobsessed]

I loved it! The directions in Braille were a hoot. Justin's questions were real and genuine. (Kids are sooo like that. Too bad adults aren't). And the harness thing? Well meaning people do things like that all the time. Just like Christie, I wonder what's bugging Jim too.

Hope there aren't too many commercials in this show! ;D

[carl1951]

thank you, thank you, thank you.

Later, Carl

[Deleted]

Ahhh.......Middle Village......where I used to live and Ron did, too........ (honest to
God!)

A few members of this board were at my house in Middle Village; I must say, the Fisks were lovely at my closing. LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

And yet, me sniffs another triumph!