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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Jul 12, 2007 21:12:43 GMT -5
I know I'm being repetitive here, but this just gets better and better. The way the case is unfolding, Marty's little shots, Fisk's conversation with Krause (Now, there's someone who needs sensitivity training.  ), the atmosphere in the darkened apartment when Christie comes home at the end of the chapter . . . I can't wait to see how this is going to play out. Here! Here! Couldn't have said it any better myself! This really is a superb piece of fan fic writing. |
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Post by hoosier on Jul 13, 2007 17:31:07 GMT -5
I was struck by the little scene where Christie comes home to the darkened apartment and the fact that she has resorted to using a timer because she assumes Jim forgets to turn on the lights. Do we assume that he is preoccupied with a case or is this one tiny example of Jim's no longer obsessing on his blindness? Maybe before he would have been absolutely sure that the lights were on because that was the normal thing to do when evening came? Food for thought.
And Krause? Will he be the next victim? Naaahhh. He'd probably chew them up and spit them out.
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Post by Chris on Jul 13, 2007 17:36:17 GMT -5
Love it so far  But, Jim.... You do know that telling Christie a lie is a very bad idea, even (or especially) if it's to protect her.... Right??? - Chris |
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Post by mlm828 on Jul 14, 2007 17:18:22 GMT -5
Chapter Five has been posted in the Fan Fiction section here.It's also at fanfiction.net: Chapter Five.Edited to add: Spoilers may follow! |
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Post by bjobsessed on Jul 14, 2007 18:32:00 GMT -5
Wow, never expected Christie to leave, but I understand both sides--Jim wanting to protect her and her wanting to know what to expect.
Can't wait to find out where the case goes too. I'm sure one of those dealers will provide a lead. Wonder if Jim feels guilty for not checking into Marshall's story. Guess we'll find out!
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Post by Duchess of Lashes on Jul 14, 2007 19:10:16 GMT -5
Another really terrific installment to - dare I say it again - a really terrific piece of fic writing! You have masterfully created tension for Jim to wade his way through on all fronts. From Christie and Marty - could it possibly get any worse? We'll see!
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Post by bjobsessed on Jul 14, 2007 23:20:26 GMT -5
Chapter Five has been posted in the Fan Fiction section here.It's also at fanfiction.net: Chapter Five.Edited to add: Spoilers may follow!Sorry! Maybe I shouldn't get so specific. I just get carried away sometimes and forget that some people read the last 20 posts and not thread by thread like I do.  |
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Post by matilda on Jul 15, 2007 2:17:19 GMT -5
Also really enjoying the tension and great new character - Cat. Rounds Christie character - where's she's from etc. Love male/female reactions - he thinks he's doing the right thing, she thinks he's lying. Classic.
Cheers and thanks
Matilda
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Post by krissie on Jul 15, 2007 4:09:27 GMT -5
I've been meaning to post for a few days to say how much I'm liking this one. However, somehow I haven't quite got around to it. Anyway... I have been enjoying Cop Killer. I was happy to see that you'd brough Phil Krause back again, and I'm hoping that he will get his come-uppance in this story. (If he doens't... Oh, well.) Chapter five, though... Oh, wow! You did the impossible. You made me feel sympathetic towards Christie! Very, very well done. And the bit towards the end... I don't blame her one bit. I think I'm going to have to karma you for this!  I wonder what Jim meant by his message. H'm.... Looking forward to the next part. When will that be, exactly? Krissie |
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Post by Chris on Jul 16, 2007 14:29:32 GMT -5
Jim, I told you it was a bad idea!!!! Karma, MLM, I am so enjoying this  - Chris |
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Post by Colorado girl on Jul 16, 2007 20:28:48 GMT -5
I am enjoying the fan fic, Martha. I can't wait to see what "not forgetting" means. I have always enjoyed the scenes with the marital tension between Jim and Christie... Makes them seem so much like every other couple trying to work on a relationship. I also like the way you introduced the character of Cat. She is named appropriately. Christie's family always seem to have that smugness that causes such friction with Jim. I am looking forward to the next installment.
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Post by maggiethecat on Jul 17, 2007 16:34:19 GMT -5
Oh, you are so-o-o-o nailing this one, mlm.  I love the way the Jim/Christie quarrels just boil up before they can get a handle on them or stop to think about what they're saying, which is so realistic. You really have captured the Christie Conundrum: We completely understand why she behaves the way she does, but at the same time there's just something about the woman that makes you want to shake her by the shoulders until her earrings fly off! And that Cat! Woof. What a witch.  Keep it coming -- I can't wait for the next installment. |
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Post by hoosier on Jul 17, 2007 17:36:08 GMT -5
It just keeps getting better and better! I , too, love the situation with Jim and Christie. Of course, Jim could not resist calling her--probably to see if she went through with the threat or turning off her phone! And the new wrinkle of a hostile sister-in-law and a drug deal gone bad to keep us on the edge of our seats.
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Post by rducasey on Jul 17, 2007 18:26:30 GMT -5
Ah so good, Martha. Now that my company is gone, I was able to sit and digest the whole thing today. Great job. I love it and can't wait for more.
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Post by mlm828 on Jul 18, 2007 0:40:26 GMT -5
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), the atmosphere in the darkened apartment when Christie comes home at the end of the chapter . . . 
